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Are you kidding me Medusa? This was for a class !? Stephenie Meyer isn't that great. :roll: Hmm, I think the worst writing assignments are the ones you get in ...

Okay, okay... here is the link to the first part, though you don't have to start critiquing until part 3 or 4. The first few are good, my later ones ...

Done, and done! ~Yoyo 8)

Awww! Very cute! 1- You need capitalization and some more punctuation I think. 2- I love the shape! I don't know if you did that on purpose, or what, but ...

Hmm, I like how you keep it vauge in the first few paragraphs, but maybe it's a bit too vauge? Maybe give some hints as to their surroundings. When I ...

Ooooh! Pretty!!! I love the water droplets! They're to tiny! And the focus is amazing. O.o Did you use a macro lens?? Gorgeous. ^_^ ~Yoyo 8)

Hey guys! I'm writing a research paper on the meaning of life and the New Age Movement. It would be greatly helpful if you could take this poll seriously because ...

I am now taking requests for critiques! :D What I Will Crit: * denotes what I'm best at. * Poetry - all genres Fiction - I prefer short stories. I ...

Mmmm, short poem. Me likey! :D The first line is really cliche. That's about my biggest complaint. If there was something you chould change it to that was less cliche, ...

Fisrt stanza, and the first line. I'm already thinking, "Why do I care?" Depressing poems start like this waaaay too often and it makes people not want to read on. ...

Mandala Mandala; your repeated patterns, round and never ending. Many soothing colors in kaleidoscope ways, keeps the eyes moving along, meandering a path through your middle, letting you invade and ...

Yaaaay! Thanks sooo much! It's gorgeous! *wishes she could give it ten stars* ^_^ You're awesome! *huggle* :D ~Yoyo 8)

AHA! You write on your hand too Suz! XD I do that aaaalllll the time. Hahaha, my mom bugs me for it but you can loose paper! And I just ...

Great quote! The line break is awkward in line one. Unless you're trying to achieve some sense of rythm or ryhme I haven't picked up on, leave "down" on the ...

Ahahaha! Brilliant love! Keep making more! Actually... my avatar came from something similar to this. I punched a smiley face in a foil juice top, then my friend punched it, ...