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That's awesome!!! Very spiffy! Can't wait to see the full gear! ;) ~Yoyo 8)

I don't think freewebs will let you use custom template unless you bought and registered a domain name. They do, however, have plently of their own professionally designed templates for ...

Dark, empty and confined in a lightless, dirty room within a thousand screaming , [comma] listless[s],[/s] [no comma] -when you're listing two descriptions, you need commas between them, but not ...

O_O *bows to the magnificence that is Snoinkus*

Big Brother finally decided to join the real Jedi. ^_^

Oye, dear... I already critiqued that for you. ;)

Don't Be Afraid of Me Don't be afraid of me My light is yours to take You lit me on fire and my life's greatest joy would be to give ...

I like this. It's creepy but it's good. First, I like the repetition especially as in this part: "as eyes met eyes, mouth met mouth, flesh met flesh," Awesome. Then, ...

*pokes this* I'm still open for reviews!!! :D

I don't like it... squish the bug pleeeease! :(

"Songs were about [s]busses[/s] buses ," I know it looks weird, but I believe that's how it's spelled. "Cuts were wha t happened when you fell over," Typo. "Ro m ...

This is a beautiful first attempt at poetry! But as Adna said, it could be so much better if you expanded on this. You've got a good concept here, but ...

I like it so far! "little comments spew from their mouths like vomit of the tongue." I'd move this line break to be like so. Good, good! I think it ...

Welcome to the YWS! This is sort of cute and short. But too short. I don't really have much to say about it other than you really need to expand ...

This is quite simple, but one thing I think would make this infinitely better, is to take off the tags. i.e. "Sight, Sound, Touch, Smell, Taste." Then see if they ...