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Italics=flashbacks “So what do you think about him?” Gregory said moving closer to me hoping to hear me over the pounding music. “Well, he’s sweet,nice,funny,and cute; but I wish he ...

(This is just a review of the first post) The beginning dialogue between the protagonist and her boyfriend in the beginning just seem so unrealistic for high school kids. Remember, ...

Sidenote-flashbacks=italics “Yes we have like 20 of them at home. The house smells like casseroles and if you haven’t noticed, so do we.” Shanna said with a smirk on her ...

This story is pretty good. You had a good hook that kept me reading on. you're discriptions were pretty decent and how you described the character's personalities is really good. ...

I overall really think this story has good potential if you work on the little things. But the plot is good and unexpected. I kinda got confused on some parts ...

I really liked this one. Its easy to relate to and very well written. You captured the emotions perfectly both good and bad. How she couldn't be without him but ...

usually when i come to this forum nothing really catches my eye. But you had me from the first sentences and i just couldn't stop reading. This was absolutely sensational. ...

Chapter 1 “What song would describe your life?” He asked me looking directly at me with his hazel green eyes. God, I would do anything when he looked at me ...

i thought it was simple and cute. the scenes were intimate but i really didn't fell the love connection as much as i thought i should have. But overall it ...

I really liked the beginning and kept me reading. It was sweet but i feel that it needed a little more "meat" to it, if you get what I'm saying.

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