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So I've been working on this new story for a while. I haven't been on YWS or talked to you guys in what seems like forever, so I thought this ...

So I've been working on this new story for a while. I haven't been on YWS or talked to you guys in what seems like forever, so I thought this ...

Lethero wiped the blood off on the white shirt of the dead man laying on his back in front of him, before returning it to its scabbard on his left ...

Lethero wiped the blood off on the white shirt of the dead man laying on his back in front of him, before returning it to its scabbard on his left ...

This was chilling and beautiful and I absolutely loved it. I think this is something that should, and easily could be published. I can't find anything to complain about really. ...

I think that the talking aloud to herself is a little awkward. You could fix this by italicizing the words she said, taking away the quotation marks, and instead of ...