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Re: Dreams
I enjoyed this a lot. (: I wish I had the time to do a full critique... :/ Keep writing. -KAT
Wed Aug 18, 2010 2:40 am -
Re: Never let music die
Oh my god. I really liked this. I relate to it, the imagery is great... Keep up the good work. -KAT
Wed Aug 18, 2010 2:31 am -
Re: Depression
The rain is cool and just a drizzle, it almost feels nice on my skin. The clouds are looking a bit too dismal, standing outside my gloomy inn. My home, ...
Wed Aug 18, 2010 2:21 am -
Re: Originality.
Thank you all so much, Im flattered, and its greatly appreciated that you guys took the time to read a poem by little me. (: This was just somthing I ...
Thu Aug 05, 2010 1:41 am -
Re: I couldn't think of a title for it.
I enjoyed this poem. Its a bit too happy for my taste, but I enjoyed it anyways. (: It flowed nicely, and you rhymed almost perfectlly. I really hope you ...
Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:48 am -
Re: Yesterday I found a box
Upon this shelf also sits nit knacks from my past. A crumpled note, a sweet love song, and an old faded photograph. This was one of the best poems I ...
Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:44 am -
Re: Children
I really liked this. This poem doesnt lie, it points out the sad truth to the reader and I like that. It made me think of how it went from ...
Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:37 am -
Re: Originality.
These days, the world lacks color. Originality is what we crave. Dont be like every other. Dont be the world's bland slave. Be who you want to be. Dont listen ...
Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:27 am -
Re: Castle Of Clouds
Castle Of Clouds;; When I first met you, I wasnt so sure. You seemed like a little bit of a bore. That was before, of course, you promised me a ...
Thu Jul 01, 2010 1:57 am -
Re: lips to my pain
Good work my elf! (: I like how it flows evenly. Its not like mine where I have a diffucult time rhyming and such. Its beautiful! Love always, Kat. =^..^=
Sat May 29, 2010 9:11 pm -
Re: Death Is An Angel
I won't lie to you none of it flowed and when that happens others don't know what you are tyring to make them see and that can throw them off ...
Sat May 29, 2010 9:05 pm -
Re: Black Hole
Well my focus wasnt literally a black hole, it was more of a metaphore. But thanks for the pointers, ideas, and ect. Its greatly appreciated. (:
Sat May 29, 2010 8:57 pm -
Re: Death Is An Angel
I liked this; it was quite sweet and contemplative. Only thing that annoyed me was that some of the rhymes are a bit awkward - angel/archangel, for example. Maybe that ...
Sun May 23, 2010 10:10 pm -
Re: Death Is An Angel
They say death is a bucket of bones, working for the devil, living off loans. Who said death isnt an angel? Higher than the others, an archangel? Dark as black ...
Sun May 23, 2010 9:36 pm -
Re: Black Hole
The world has gone pitch black, happiness is what I lack. I need a hand to guide me, rather than to hide me. Im alone in a black hole. Yes ...
Sun May 23, 2010 9:23 pm
