xoCairo

With all due respect, and not to sound creepy, but you guys are all so pretty (-cough- yes, that includes the guys? ;p ) SisterItaly: hey, I have a paperweight ...

Summary Of The Story So Far Enter Julian. Tall, pale man, only nineteen years of age but he has seen far more than most will in their lifetime. He is ...

Detail. Detail. Detail, please. It's the key part of writing. There's a fine line between too much detail and too little - you are way into the 'too little' zone. ...

Hey, Uldin, I'm Cairo. Welcome to YWS! :) I hope you like it here (I sure do). That's cool that you've written a novel. I think I might check it ...

Well... Your first sentence should be aimed to capture the reader's attention. Your character is bored. So are we. Yours was, unfortunately, very mundane and ordinary, not something that most ...

"Jumpstart" (just finished) and "Break It Up" by These Kids Wear Crowns. Canadian music < 3 ...and the radio's playing in the background. xD Edit: Now listening to "Oceans" by ...

Cat (o.o?)

The first paragraph made me wonder if you had a prologue. Because it sort of picked up in the middle of nowhere. o.o'' It took me a while to realize ...

I actually liked this poem. It showed the emotion pretty well; more so a battle of anger versus confusion versus care for the person, I suppose. But either way, it ...

Garamond Premier, Kai, and a few others. I get frustrated if I'm writing with a font I don't like.

Fortunately, the zombies have suddenly decided to be vegetarians and thus do not eat anything but plants.

Well, your poem is interesting. Not badly written. Though I do have the feeling that you were stretching for rhymes. A lot of what you used just didn't fit and ...

Diego Naturally, if somebody tells you that you're going to be living with three guys, you'd find this a little weird, if not awkward. Especially if they are supposedly 'adopting' ...

Wow, I really enjoyed this poem. :) It's powerful and interesting. The images you've painted are quite vivid and in all honesty I can't find a thing wrong with it. ...

The annual Festival of Magic would have been held that last week of July, but unfortunately, for nearly the last century the festival has not been held; it shall not ...