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I have, actually, read your prologue. If you take a look, I left you a comment. So the confusion is from someone who's read all of it so far.

comments changes Alec awoke to a beam of light shooting across the room, a thief breaking in through a gap in the blinds. (Honestly, the first two times I read ...

Well, this is intriguing, but I don't think it works well as a prologue. It makes me think of the descriptions on the back of books. Interesting, but not giving ...

:) This made me smile (which is kind of odd, considering the subject). The stereotypes are quite true, and you've captured it well. Just about any person can relate to ...

When I was young, I would stand in front of my bathroom mirror and whisper, as most little girls do, "Mirror, mirror, on the wall, who's the prettiest of them ...

I have to say, I was impressed by your first sentence. It definitely intrigued me; I wanted to know why. Why paradise? Why birds? Well done. :) I did, however, ...

Scarlettfire - Thanks. :) AspiringAuthorA..M - all of the pictures are Canada, considering I'm Canadian. ;D But yes, the second picture is near Athabasca Falls in Jasper National Park, Canada.

Wow. This was pretty powerful, for the most part, and enjoyable in its depressingness. I think you ended it a bit abruptly though. It feels like it's still hanging - ...

:P I loved this! It was funny, and just about everyone here can relate. I haven't even been a member for a week and already I've neglected most of the ...

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The red on "light" was very powerful for emphasis. It also caught my interest right away. Well done there. :) It helped your poem out quite a bit, made it ...

I liked this. The emotion and the message behind it. The first stanza made me smile; quite a sentence to be best friends over. I liked the progression through it, ...

I think you have an interesting idea here. I'd definitely like to read more and see where this goes. However, there are some things I believe need to be changed. ...

changes comments Loved this line When we first met each other, we were naive and very young. We were very different, this line sounded very awkward the way it was ...

My life itself has become a chore, In which I'm forced to abandon hope And hang my soul up at the door. Fear, panic, weakness mix, Setting fire to my ...