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Well, this was definitely dark, and overall I liked it. Your descriptions and repetitions were well done, and the poem generally gives off a powerfully depressive feel. All of the ...

Please Read The Author's Note Below! There are two versions of this poem, both of which are posted here. The first does not rhyme; that's the original. The second I ...

corrections/changes comments I blinked, I swallowed, then raised my eyebrows. I wanted to laugh for some reason or to scream. -- I didn't like this line all that much. I ...

Personally, I know nothing about nuns in the 1800s, so if anything's unhistorical, I can't exactly comment. It seems very factual to me, though, and I can definitely say that ...

Love is a butterfly. It alights upon my knee, Twitching its wings, Looking up at me. But it won't stay for long, I know. Even love has to go. The ...

I feel like a murderer: There is blood on my hands But when has there not been? (no one understands) I am in complete shock: I've never thought myself capable ...

changes/corrections comments That dark, grim door mocks me as I sit here. (-- I might suggest a more interesting way to start this; while it is relatively short, you still ...

Now come one, come all to this tragic affair Wipe off that makeup, what's in is despair So throw on the black dress, mix in with the lot You might ...

Hey; Well I found this... interesting. Once I managed to get past the abbreviations/spelling issues, it was interesting enough. Overall, the story idea is interesting but I feel like the ...

"Rest in peace…" The worlds are unfamiliar as she reads them out, her hands shaking on the paper that bears those very words. Tears are slowly falling from her eyes, ...

In all honesty, I was trying to come up with something for my mother for mother's day. The poem kind of has a mind of its own. I'm not entirely ...

comments changes Thunder claps, the sky grows dark. Bring on the rain. Lightning where is the spark? This line didn't seem right to me. I'd suggest revising the one above ...

comments The golden stars are what makes me smile on the darkest nights, I feel like this line was too long in comparison. Try to shorten it. How about: Golden ...

changes comments (Nick) ~Singing only keeps me from crying~ She looked beautiful , e ven though her eyes were puffy and red. Bit by bit , Nick had been able ...

comments changes purple! :D Prologue: As kids, Abigail and Nick were best friends. Never apart. Once they reached 5 years old, Nick went off to school, and Abigail was homeschooled. ...