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first of all let me say that dreams are an excellent medium for starting stories. a few of my stories (most of them still in progress) are from dreams. in ...

not bad :-) i got how you were saying as soon as you got onto campus your freedom would be restricted (in ur 1st paragraph) but the puncuation could use ...

alot of your sentences start with "I am", try to avoid the typical pronoun-verb beginning. it gets boring after a while. also, how would knights (i assume they are knights) ...

if Atom is capitalized, then Bomb should be as well, since you are personifying the Bomb. I'd split up the stanzas and condense the lines, as Brad showed. I love ...

chapters 6-7 of my revolution book, enjoy :-) btw you find out who the friend from the 7th chapter is in the first line of the 8th chapter, so don't ...

so im writing this novella, and the four main characters are based on me and three friends - one being my ex - and the plot is going every which ...

this reads like prose, it might be better as a story. small grammer detail: you say It's once where you should use its (line 20) so whats happening? shes changing? ...

this is rated pg-13 for a little bit of language. anyone have any good ideas for a title? enjoy :-) Chapter Five I stumble out of the overcrowded building with ...

wow, to be completely honest this is incredible, well done :-)

if all else fails, graph it on your calculator.

o and you dont HAVE to divide by the 2, that would just be any number that you are guessing is a 0. sythetic division is basically guess and check.

you can still divide synthetically, just do this: 2/ 12 -1 0 0 6 -1 0 1 -3 then continue on like you would normally synthetically divide, just dont forget ...

i see everyone else basically has this covered, so im going to avoid beating a dead horse and be quick about this. It was the first week of school and ...

way too choppy honestly stories don't work as just dialogues, unless its going to be a play. i could tell where the conversations divided, sortof, but you REALLY need to ...

i really with you would have kept going with the idea that Molly was talking to the main character. That would have been really interesting. All in all, i like ...