xavia-finch

OMG I love your short stories. But then again I hate them, because they are short. Post another one!! You should somehow link your short stories together or something and ...

Omg he's a werewolf is he??? that's so clever, I only just got it. I was wondering what was the go with him. Is this set in germany?? The german ...

wow i can safely say that this is THE BEST story i have ever read on this site. It was the perfect mix of metaphors, narrative, dialogue and tension. It ...

Chapter One Noel Flincher sat in the back of the classroom, eyes closed. She wasn’t asleep. She wasn’t daydreaming. She was screaming. >>> Is she literally screaming in class? That ...

Thanks, all critiques appreciated: Chapter One: Of a Blind Man Do not empathise; blame me. Nature’s flight is a far memory—in a split second her wings beat against the breeze, ...

Thank you xavia-finch for your advice...I really like your ideas and I'll look it over and see what I can do to tell you the truth I put this all ...

Yeah but the first few chapters of harry potter was still linked to the fantasy world. There were clues to the magic world from the first page. Anyways thats fine, ...

I critiqued your prologue but not yet the first or second chapters. Mainly because its late and I just wanted to read the story, which is a good sign!! It ...

To anyone who reads through the whole thing, I thank you. Prologue “I don’t think I’ll ever fully understand your game,” Dala grumbled, digging her talons into the supple wood ...

Yeah... I kind of agree with GriffinKeeper. And there is no point posting your work if you cant take criticism... or "if we don't have good things to say." How ...

I think it is a good story, but that doesn't mean its perfect. Only you know where its going so I cant really tell if its going to be wonderful ...

Okay so this is the first part of my first story that I've ever submitted. I'm still a little new at this so I guess could use all the help ...

Okay so this is the first part of my first story that I've ever submitted. I'm still a little new at this so I guess could use all the help ...

She was wading through a sea of clothing, whites, blacks, greys, as all the drab colours of the world sat at her feet. Standing on a tall pile of clothing ...

Hear hear sorsha! Dw.. its not just your stories that have received pointless comments from -