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Hey =] I definitely agree with the other two reviewers, in that this is a powerful piece. Nit-piks; Finally!! - Too much punctuation looks unprofessional. One exclamation mark is enough. ...

Hey Sela =] Thanks for the PM! So, I only noticed one nit-pik; before sat down at last in the kitchen - You need 'I' before 'sat' Story-wise, I'm still ...

Hey Evi =] I couldn't find any mistakes at all whilst reading this - so well done on that =] It flowed extremely well and I'm really jealous of your ...

Hey =] So I've just read all three parts that you have posted so far and I really have nothing bad to say at all. I couldn't find any mistakes, ...

Hey =] I'm going to try and take a look at this for ya' They glow and their color is as rich as gems, my eyes cannot even see the ...

Hey =] So I don't really have time at the moment to give this a proper review, but I had to tell you that I think this story is adorable. ...

Hey Meg =] Thanks for the PM! So... onto nit-piks =] Maybe there's a whole pack of celebrities that are secretly magical elves. - I lol'd at this :lol: She ...

Hey =] So I've read both parts of this and I have to say that it was a really enjoyable read. You managed to turn a story about two brothers ...

Hey Pen =] I got all smiley when I saw that you'd posted these parts. I loved the first two chapters and didn't hesitate to read these two chapters too, ...

Hey Meg =] Wow. I wish could make up a story as good as this without knowing where the plot is heading! I'm really creeped out by this - not ...

Hey Lisa =] I'm sorry that I haven't gotten around to reviewing this for you sooner - I've been so tired (my fault for going out clubbing all the time) ...

Hey Yoda =] So... I really have nothing bad to say about your writing. You make it vary hard for me to give you a proper review :roll: I couldn't ...

Hey =] I'm Dudette and I'm going to take a look at this for ya' Just a quick note before I start though. People tend to be put of reading ...

Hey Lily =] I'm back for part two! So... who would move the soul - I'd add 'then' after 'would' for she was not the only one, Death Bringers. - ...

Hey Lily =] I was searching through for something to review and the title of your story caught my eye :) I'm going to take a look at this for ...