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Hey! I liked this :) The plot interests me and I like the way your character thinks/ describes things. 1. Nit-piks - maybe if I’d worn sweats instead Levis that ...

Hey Lena! I thought it would be easier to explain about expanding the ending here rather than in a PM. So. I do like the ending, but when he says ...

Hey Lena! I thought this was brilliant! You had me fooled into believing Mary Jane was a girl right up until he walked into his house to see all of ...

Hey CaseySaz! I really enjoyed this. You captured the same scene from two points of view really well. I only noticed a few things - The worry-wart parents who spring ...

Hey Skins! I'm still following this as you have me hooked :) I haven't commented on the other parts as others have already pointed out the things I would have ...

Hey! I really liked this! You held my attention throughout the whole piece and your writing has a nice flow to it, making it easy to read. The plot was ...

Hey TmB317! I liked this :) You held my attention throughout the piece and I liked how it was as if the narrator was talking directly to me, encouraging me ...

Hey Nerdburga! Since you reviewed my contest entry, I thought I'd return the favour :) So, I agree with everything that Fantasy mentioned above. You have a nice little plot ...

Hey fight4whatisright! First off, I love how you quote lyrics before the chapter. Music is my main muse when I write and I'm always writing chapters or scenes of my ...

Hey Megsug! That definitely is a random prompt :P His parents had dropped him off. "You're out of control, Jason. Therapy will help you. We've got to go." And they ...

Hey Pointe! I think this is cute :) I couldn't find many mistakes - so props to you :) been left on MY I don't think 'my' needs to be ...

Hey! This isn't bad for something that you 'just had to write down.' I do have a couple of suggestions - Luckily the moon peeked out from behind the clouds ...

Hey! I'm back to review the last part :) 1. Nit-piks - First period... Science, a teacher constantly on a coffee high, spewing econ-friendly crap, and, right beside me, Lila. ...

Hey again! I couldn't resist reviewing this too :) I take the wrench from my dad's toolbox and tighten a bolt, taking deep breaths, trying to fight the urge to ...

Hey Megsug! I read this a couple of days ago, but I never got around to reviewing it, so I'm back to look through this for ya! 1. Nit-piks - ...