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Hey Jas! I really am enjoying this story. The wording is great and it seems to be flowing along quite nicely. The only thing I'm still unsure about is how ...

Hey Jas! So there's not much that I can really say without being repetitive, but I just wanted to comment saying how much I'm enjoying this story. The tension that's ...

Previously, Aiden came to Harriet's dance class and they had a moment. And I'm sorry for the weird formatting. This chapter doesn't seem to want to sit right on YWS. ...

Hey there icy! This was short and full to the brim with emotion. I liked the descriptions you used, and the way you worded her feelings was great, too. I ...

Hey there! I've decided that I really like your writing. Both pieces that I've read by you have been great. They flow well, the characters are believable and they keep ...

Hey oddkid! Sorry I haven't been following this as closely as I would have liked. Life got in the way, but I'm here now! Being away from your writing and ...

So, people who've read my work before will know that I generally write depressing stuff full of anger and teenage angst. But the other day I was listening to a ...

Hey there! I think this was great. The way you desribed things was lovely, and the way you portrayed her feelings was very believable. It wasn't too 'woe is me,' ...

Hey there! First off, welcome to YWS! I hope you have a great time here :) I think this was a great idea for a story. You have a good ...

Hey there! The first thing that stuck out to me while reading this, is that you have a bit of trouble with your punctuation. Rosey Unicorn wrote a great post ...

9/10 So true

Hello again, Spark! I enjoyed this part just as much as the first chapter, so good job! The other reviewers seem to have done a pretty good job of pointing ...

Hey there, Spark! I'm here as promised :) So okay, I liked this. I've always wanted to write a fantasy story, but I seem to lack the ability to come ...

I don't use some of these, but these slang words are local to where I'm from. Bear in mind that where I'm from, a lot of people don't pronounce the ...