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lol - thanks!i'll change it :D

Yeah that would probably sound better...thanks

Cool - thanks...just going to change it...

Very nice. I was hooked the whole way through.

Really good. Got me hooked.

WOW! This is amazing. I was completely and utterly hooked. I want to know what happens next! Very very well done. This is better than many published stories - in ...

I really liked it. It was nice all the way through - really touching. I like the description and you can really relate with the character :D

It was good...can't think of any improvements. It was lovely to read and well written

Ok, obviously everybody has gone through most of the mistakes. I would like to say that this is quite good. Though it looks more like a draft to me - ...

really sweet and touching. nice poem - flowed well

I agree it could have been shorter...but nice all the same

Hey i changed it.

hey cool thanks. ill keep that in mind.

I peer nervously over my mug to see if Billy has noticed the time yet. Maybe, if I’m very lucky he will forget and we’ll never have to go over! ...

beautiful