wstoffel101

This is nicely done. The only thing is that it's kind of confusing what's happening. Also the words "Me" seem misplaced, maybe remove them? Just an idea. Good work, keep ...

I like the texture of your piece. One thing I thought didn't fit was or when your tongue magnificently flips. But other then that it's pretty good. I agree with ...

Wow, that is beautiful and morbid at the same time. I love it. Great job!! I love the word choice and the imagery it puts off. Keep on writing. =))

Speechless. This poem really spoke to me. Besides the "e" deal, It's close to perfect. Good flow, beautiful words. I really enjoyed. I hope you keep writing more. =) Great ...

I like how it all flowed together but one part kind of seemed, choppy maybe? I held it in mine, just hoping it might Move. I loved the poem but ...

Wow, beautiful. I loved it. Almost had a tear in my eye honestly. I can kind of relate to Reba, my mother got married four years ago and he is ...

I really enjoyed this! I like the descriptions and the imagery you used in the first paragraph but, keep doing it throughout the entire prologue. It's kind of confusing why ...

Very beautifully put. I love how unique it is compared to most things pieces about stars. --wendy

This defiantly got my attention, I want to know more! I suggest you elaborate more on the heart condition she has. Explain more about it. Details are the key! Keep ...

I think Rush has potential. Maybe add more details, more ajd, and such, it seems a but bland. Maybe use this as a rough draft and do some revising. I ...

Thanks for the comment. You're right, it was a bit rushed. It's really just a rough draft. I planned on adding to it and revising, all that jazz. But figured ...

--Chapter One-- Just incredible. Amazing, this boy that walked through my door one evening. Just another party, or so I thought. Just another group of my friends and their friends ...