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Re: Don't Be Such a Witch
Thanks--I agree.
Apr 28, 2010 -
Re: Stop the Masquerade Prolouge
You've got a great idea here! Although, I do agree with Embee, you need to pace yourself. Really make the reader dislike Melanie and fear Sofia. You have great descriptions ...
Apr 27, 2010 -
Re: Walking Dead - Chapter 1 [EDITED]
An unbelievable turning point in my life…I still couldn’t believe I really accepted the offer to move to a different flat and look after somebody. It’s completely not my style, ...
Apr 26, 2010 -
Re: Boys Next Door Chapter One
You're off to a great start! I just have several things I'd like to offer pointers on. I've only reviewed part of your work, but if you like what I've ...
Apr 26, 2010 -
Re: Secrets - Chapter 1
Great idea to make a story about the daughter of spies, instead of the actual spies--very orignal. But when I was reading, I started to wonder...would the daughter of two ...
Apr 26, 2010 -
Re: Don't Be Such a Witch
Don't Be Such a Witch © Copyright 2010 by Ali Mac Ash Maverick is a total witch! Literally. She just doesn’t know it yet. In her town, where you’re either ...
Apr 26, 2010 -
Re: Prologue
UHHH! Speechless.... You did an awesome job at drawing me, a reader, in and making me want more, more, more! And to top it off, I don't even have anything ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: Slayed Soul - Prologue
Wow! Goosebumps were popping up on my arms! You have a GREAT idea! Definitely take it all the way! One thing I did notice was that your prologue started out ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: Untitled.
This is starting out really great! You've got me curious about the mom, and wondering what's going on that they have to move so much--and about Holly. Keep going! Now ...
Apr 25, 2010
