written_on_my_heart

almost as good as the last and I must say that I will check up on your new additions! Maybe as a formal request you could make an ode to ...

I love it because it is honest and true. Sweet and simple. Life is a bitch, but you know, what can we really do???

misery is a painting misery is a painting, turns all color to gray. misery is a painting, highlights every fray. misery is a painting, darkens all the light. misery is ...

wonderful actually, now everytime I look in the mirror, I will have so many questions.. (do I really see myself or am I nothing...??) You are a great poet, I ...

Well, since you're new I can give you a break. Being "the new kid in town" isn't always easy and remember I am here if you need me! Well lets ...

tee hee... i'm tickled pick! Very funny.... sounds like my room.. (few old lunches in there... you know??) Kidding, but it flowed nicely, and the topic, through completely random, says ...

The tone is very angry... do you need to talk to someone? I understand the overall idea but it conveys to the reader a very negative irony. Try again sweetheart.

critique this please?

You know what, I am not just going to put down this poem because I don't believe in god... It was good... even if he isn't physically here to read ...

Very nice, well done.... one problem.. I think that this poem would have sounded 10X much better if you continued the rhyme scheme. Other than that.... great very nice.

Well, honestly there is not much of a difference between the two... Merely a change in how you arranged the sentances. I have to say it left me asking a ...

awww... how sad... but we all feel this way sometimes... is this anything that connects to you personally? I really like this poem! It is short, sweet, and to the ...

Looking in the mirror, she doesn't recognize her face. Sadly he didn't love her, he only liked the chase. Heart broken, and tears shedding, through the pain and agony of ...

amazing, that was a really strong poem. Consider publishing that in a book or something. You wouldn't want anyone stealing that! :)

okay first off, I saw one mistake... you spelled lying wrong... (see above)... Other than that it was superb... the rythm was great and kept my attention throughout the literary ...