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Good story! And your only 13?!? If I may make some suggestions: “Yeah, but I needed to talk to you about something more important,” he replied, (as fear emerged from ...

This is good, however if I may make a suggestion: The second stanza where you write "where she is..." "where she is..." "where she is..." I think is a little ...

This is good. I made the suggestions I found. Just a note, I think you could probably expand it more. I feel I am reading just the beginning of a ...

This is really good! I have made my suggestions, and you can either take it or leave it. “Can you tell us what happened?” They asked me. A simple question. ...

I limp into myself hiding before fear can find me againI am so afraidIn that darkDusty cornerI find a matchOld and unusedMaybe it can give me warmthThe strike is the ...

This is a great part. I have made suggestions, and you can either take 'em or leave 'em: As soon as I walked into the library, I hit the computers. ...

Good part of the story. Here are some suggestions I have made: The warmth in the air was not unusual. No, even in the cellar the radiator could create such ...

Chapter Two - ...Comes The Flighty Wanderer As soon as the overpowering combination of harsh soap and flowery perfume hit her nose, Ariana distinctly knew she was out of place. ...