writingruff

This is well written, the image is awesome. I like how you ask the questions in the middle stanzas, and how you end the poem. Probably not my favorite poem, ...

I like the rhyming, and this is a very well done poem by only a 12 year old. I also love the image

Its a good poem, I like the image throughout. I also like the rhyming, and how you end the poem (the last stanza)

This is funny! Burger king is awesome! they probably have taken the Wendy's customers

Chapter 2: life and death Full of agony and sorrow, Themeus wept violently beside his dead friend. Sitting on the cold ground, Themeus lowered his head to his knees. His ...

This is well done! I especially like the lines "Earth, O Earth, why do you shatter, Let the blood of fam'lies splatter, Let the hearts of children stop, Meanwhile let ...

This is good, I would take out the word "For" in the last line, but overall well done

Good! In the line "Not a lonesome word escapes this" I would suggest clarifying "This" but the poem is well written

Good! I like the lines in the first stanza, "A labyrinth of a winding vine Yes,freedom is a state of mind" In the second stanza, I would remove the word ...

I like the line in the first stanza, "That the grief of yesterdays convulsions", and I love how you pose the questions in the last stanza

I like how you present both sides, and how you question your reader at the end

This is really good!

I like this, and how you describe fear in the 2nd stanza

Good poem, I felt it ended abruptly though

Well done