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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Critiquing Woes

    Thats awesome, even though its short its good. The shortest poem ever written was entitled "fleas" an it this was it: "Adam had 'em" thats a nice short poem

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Take Wing [Chapter One]

    Good story! And your only 13?!? If I may make some suggestions: “Yeah, but I needed to talk to you about something more important,” he replied, (as fear emerged from ...

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Media Reviews Re: Mischief Managed: Saying "Until Next Time" To Harry

    This was really good! Well done! It felt like I was reading a published article on Harry potter. I love how you end it too, its brilliant! Keep it up!

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Forsaken

    I really enjoyed it. I love the way you tie the 2nd line to the last line. Well done!

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: The girl in the mirror

    This is good, however if I may make a suggestion: The second stanza where you write "where she is..." "where she is..." "where she is..." I think is a little ...

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: A Tribute to Harry Potter

    This was really good, I like how you explain where you would read Harry Potter. It was very cool how you brought in the characters too

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Official Polls Re: Are you writing a novel?

    Yes I am I have written a seventeen chapter children/young adult fantasy novel that I began at age fourteen. I am in the process of editing my novel and polishing ...

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Deep Magic Chapter 1: Part 1

    This is good. I made the suggestions I found. Just a note, I think you could probably expand it more. I feel I am reading just the beginning of a ...

    Apr 6, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: 3 Days in Hades

    This is really good! I have made my suggestions, and you can either take it or leave it. “Can you tell us what happened?” They asked me. A simple question. ...

    Apr 6, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Endurance

    I limp into myself hiding before fear can find me againI am so afraidIn that darkDusty cornerI find a matchOld and unusedMaybe it can give me warmthThe strike is the ...

    Apr 6, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Tainted-Chapter 4

    This is a great part. I have made suggestions, and you can either take 'em or leave 'em: As soon as I walked into the library, I hit the computers. ...

    Mar 29, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Dimension Shift -- Chapter One

    Good part of the story. Here are some suggestions I have made: The warmth in the air was not unusual. No, even in the cellar the radiator could create such ...

    Mar 25, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Blackened Runes - Chapter Two

    Chapter Two - ...Comes The Flighty Wanderer As soon as the overpowering combination of harsh soap and flowery perfume hit her nose, Ariana distinctly knew she was out of place. ...

    Mar 22, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The War of Time: The Destiny of Themeus-Ch. Three 2nd draft

    Chapter 3: A perilous journey Trymissius heard the sound of boisterous hooves, as Heládran’s army rode toward the empty plain. “I told you, Heládran. I made it very clear to ...

    Mar 22, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Ludicrous Love

    This is well-written, its not a type of poetry that I read a lot of, but its well-written and I like the ending

    Mar 22, 2011


How odd I can have all this inside me and to you it’s just words.
— David Foster Wallace