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I stood on the cemented stairs, I bring myself to knock. Patterned footsteps stomping, shivering from the cold. The rain pelting down behind me, my stomach rumbling from hunger. Strong ...

Yes it was meant to say STAY IN SCHOOL. lol... and I wasn't trying to make this a complex or interesting poem it was more becuase i was bored

His name is Tim, he was afraid of what he thought was a bad grade. He got his marks, he grew a smile. He told everyone by his mobile. He ...

I'm not commenting on the poem itself I am more commenting on the actual words... I cannot hide that I'm a woman, though you've no idea how I've tried. There's ...

Sorry, a five letter word, Carried so much feeling, once in this world. Sorry, this five letter word, Now its nothing, but just a word. This stanza is very strong ...

Hello, I am going to review your poem. Red- corrections/errors/opinions My life be like a theme park.. 'be' should be 'is'. im bein fo serious. Are you trying to say ...

Thank you for that review, I'll try and work more on my punctuation etc. You did get the point I was trying to make so well done :)

Laying on my soft settling bed, relaxing every bone in my body. Nothing springs to mind what i'm going to do today.. but why is that such a bad thing? ...

I really liked this poem also. You brought it to a whole new level with your willingness to go in more depth with the emotions. The adjectives and descriptions of ...

I really liked this poem also. You brought it to a whole new level with your willingness to go in more depth with the emotions. The adjectives and descriptions of ...

I do like these lyrics.. It has the same rhythm throughout the whole song and also flow, which some 'famous' songs kind of lack. I like how you used kind ...

Wow, this poem is really deep. The point you were making was definitely coming across to the readers i.e. me. You should be proud of yourself! Well done. ,writingaway

Hello, I am going to review your poetry. RED- corrections/opinions/errors etc. Your hair is messy like confused rain. It drives me mad as water in my ears would. i think ...

To be completely honest I didn't really get the point you and your friends were trying to make and show the readers.. To me you all made sentences just so ...

Harry James Potter, the name makes me smile. His courage and bravery has been noticed for a while. His movies excite me, I'm on the edge of my seat. What ...