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Her deep brown twinkling eyes betray no pain. She stands holding the baby version of me, leaning against my father, in this tattered photograph which I clutch with my trembling ...

Snowflakes clung wetly to the windows, slowly trickling into nothingness. Rose ventured a look down from the tenth floor of her sister’s apartment building window into the madness magnified by ...

"Sara, it's been 465 days, and I'm still waiting for tomorrow" I really like this line, although I'm not sure why. I guess it captures the length of time that ...

This is good, but I feel like I don't know enough about the speaker. However, I loved your metaphor, "gossamer on the wall." Who would have thought of that? It's ...

Campus was clearing out for the holidays. However, a few stragglers remained and could be seen braving the freezing temperatures, running last minute errands for professors that evidently did not ...

I really like this, although I liked it better at the end than the beginning, which I thought was a little boring, but I guess you have to get the ...

Hi! I think that you write well, and this is interesting, but I have a few suggestions. Try not to use cliche words and phrases, and really think out-of-the-box to ...

This is pretty good. I like the description of the setting. It paints a vivid picture in my mind's eye, but I still feel really confused about what's going on ...

Hey! This is really well-written. It sounds like an interesting first chapter and the characters seem to act as foils for each other. It will be neat to see where ...

Thanks so much for the amazing review shady. I will definitely be using your advice. Also, I felt bad for taking away the focus on Lana's two friends, Al and ...

The Journey Begins As dusk fell on the evening of the group’s departure, Elaana stood, with the other group members, by the side of the sleek-white unicorn, Lightening. Sky helped ...

After re-reading the poem (I went too fast the first time) I actually read the bottom part more clearly. I liked it a lot better but if I were the ...

Why do the same drops that persuade you to dance so energetically under their shower sing you into a motionless sleep at night? I love this line. More lines like ...

This is good and it flows nicely. The descriptions are not too obvious. I've noticed that some young writers have the tendency to always state things, like he had long ...

Elaana suddenly had an earsplitting headache. She felt like the whole world was spinning around her, causing her to feel very dizzy. She was a baby again. Huge bubbly faces ...