writewannabe

This is very good. I didn't notice any typos. Another person caught that you used the wrong to. But that is very easy to do, even if you have a ...

Thank you. I had rewritten this about three times over a period of six years and still make changes here and there.

I am sure your original poem was fine. This is very well-written. You are able to write a poem and tell a story with it. There are no forced verses ...

Wow you are right it is a confusing story. But here is a way to make it not so confusing. Take all the sentences and write a story around each ...

Okay I have never read the Twilight books or seen th movies so I can't compare this story to the series. As long as you do not take directly from ...

Even though the line structure is not consistent for the poem, for example one line will have way more words than another line, it flows very nicely from start to ...

Just when it got good, it ends! Well I hope you come back to add more to it. I am dying to find out what the girls were laughing at. ...

I like this. It can either be left the way it is-it is perfect for those short flash fiction pieces. It also can be expanded into a goo sized book. ...

My user name on TYWC was WhiteKnight. I chose it because the first novel length story I wrote is called The White Knight. I am finally getting it posted online.

The sun, climbing upwards to the highest point of the sky, revealed that it was nearing noon of that eighty-five degree day, with not a cloud in the sky, those ...

It was not until when Maria reached the castle, when reality reached her. "Oh my God," Maria thought to herself. "I just fought an actual knight." "What is wrong, Maria?" ...

This is very well written and I hope that you have expanded on this story. I honestly could not find any type, spelling or gramma mistakes. This is impressive for ...

This is very well written. However, a bit confusing Who is Diego? I am guessing that he is a wolf and has a pack of followers Also, what are the ...

You set the setting for this story perfectly in the first few paragraphs of the story. Excellent use of imagery and description. The two characters Rayne and Peter fit into ...

John's father was a priest in the old Roman Catholic Church. Is his father a Roman catholic priest? If he is you may have to change it. catholic Priests do ...