writergirl007

Wow. I don't like the cussing. Umm...This was interesting. A little creepy, and way dark. I like more lighted hearted things. And, At 12:00 pm this is not really the ...

This is just something I came up with and wanted to know what ya'll thought. Critiques are needed! :!: Writergirl 8) P.S. This is not finish. I just wanted insight ...

In Scribe's defense: Phorcys, you did say, and I quote, "These are purely opinions, feel free to disagree with all of these points." So, therefore, even though you are entitled ...

I thought it was good. I like how you added the French and definition at the beginning. It really makes the story come alive more. I didn't really see anything ...

I think it is a good prologue. I still think that the Man needs more emotion. It would make him more realistic. Writergirl

Interesting. So the dark wizard died? Natilie is his sister right? Now you can post the 5th chapter! :P I just have one thing that I would like to point ...

If he dies, I will hurt you!!!!!!! :evil: Okay, here are my suggestions: "A pile of ancient wood, the remains of a shack that would have entirely disintegrated long ago ...

You've done it again, Scribe! Always outdoing yourself I see. :wink: This time, I did find a few things that I think could use correction. "Then again, it might very ...

Hey, I just re-read your story. Where you said "she hated her with..." don't use hate twice. And, when you talked about his dad, you say "old" and I think ...

This is good. I like it. I think I see where it is going. I would be willing to help you if you need a partner. You can P.M. me. ...

I like it, but it has no plot. At least not to me. Also, the feelings of the husband seem a little harsh. Maybe a little more saddness. He just ...

Interesting. You have a unique talent. THis story was very captivating. But, I don't really understand it. Oh, well. I thought it was very well written. Writergirl

It's good. I like how the character is kind of like you (writer). I don't know what I think of the story, but the way you had this laid out, ...

I have to disagree with Twilight. Your writing is just as good as your name Scribe!!!!! I love it. Vivid pictures and wonderful description. I think I spotted a few ...

It's good. I'm glad you decided to continue it. The heroine is exactly the kind of character I like. There was only one major (actually it's kind of minor) mistake ...