writergirl007

I think it will help the story better. I would continue on this! It is really good! And, the only reason why I said that boys usually don't write romantic ...

I don't like how you repeatedly say the whoever "in question". Also, add more detail to the story! I can't even understand what's going on! Who are the characters? What ...

This was very good. I was a little surprised. (No offense) Most guys don't write Romantic stories. I have a few critiques for you. "and gaze out the window at ...

Concert, the only reason why I said it was too personal is that you use "I". I enjoy reading these type of writings, sometimes. I was just thinking that you ...

I want to commend you on your tremendous effort first of all. It's hard to post one of your works. But, this review will make you a better writer (I ...

I enjoyed this and thought it was good. Here are just a few errors I saw. "People speculated, he was only doing this to convince himself that we indeed was ...

Um...I am unsure what the plot is or where this story is going! Also, is the language neccesary? Just wondering. "I sat strumming my fingers against the arm of the ...

I only read a little, but from what I read...It's okay. I usually like descriptive writing, and in some parts of your story so far, it's good. However, you repeat ...

This is good, but I think you need a little bit more detail. Maybe, how he got into the Manor? (What is that anyways? Since you have it capitolized, I ...

This was good, but a little confusing. Are the two girls different or the same person? I can't tell! Make that clear. "Won’t change anything." This sentecne is not professional ...

Wow. Um...this is a little dark. It was well written though. It gave me shivers! Writergirl

This was good, if not a little confusing. "Sam’s angry voice was the last thing she hear before she broke" Heard instead of "hear" "The post in the kitchen in ...

This was good. "'Why have you come here to our lands?' he shouted, a voice used to giving orders." Try something like this, "he shouted commandingly." or something like that. ...

This is really good. I saw no mistakes besides the ones already mention. I'm struggling to see the connection between the prologue and this story, but I assume all will ...

Wow! Excellent! Although, I think her husband is too hard on her! I mean, it is her brother! And, I don't like the language! I know that it is his ...