writergirl007

I like this story. Very bold and dramatic. Needs more clarification in the first chapter and there is a lot of grammar. I think it has potential. Make sure you ...

This is a good description of what a story could be about. I think that you if you take this idea and turn it into an actual story, that it ...

Wonderful story. A little fuzzy in the second paragraph and at the end. Needs to be refined some, but a wonderful story so far. Clarification is needed as to whom ...

Good story, but very unclear. Go back and read it. Give more detail. Like where is this happening, what's going on, why are they running? Also, you have several spelling ...

I thought it was good. A little confusion near the bigining, but a good story. Kind of sad though. Make it a little longer with more detail and more describing ...

Forever Faithful Boats are a sailors best friend, faithful and true Risking life on end for its master and crew. Facing and fighting raging storms on misty seas, Being held ...

Great Story! I love heroines!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :lol: I can't wait to find out what happens next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Pretty good. Put more. Add detail. People like to have a background in order to understand the setting. Tell what's happening. But, I think you have a great start and ...