writergirl007

It's good. Kind of interesting. A little confusing in the middle. When she meats the dog, I do believe. I don't understand how it ties into historical fiction, but I ...

I agree with everyone else. You need more description. I think you use "This is my last drink" far to much. More description less diologe. It establishes a place for ...

It's good. A little confusing near the end. Read back over it and see where you can clarify it. Keep writing. I'll be back to see the rest of the ...

It's good. Something minor, in the first or second sentence, you have "was" instead of as. Also, you use "chopper" and "said" too much. Find synonyms for them. Perhaps ordered, ...

It's written well. Not my style so much. It's good though. Write something esle. You have a real talent. Writergirl

I think it's really good. I love the beginning. For a moment, however, I could have sworn you were writing something besides Science-Fic. It's wonderful. I really don't see anything ...

It's good. I'm not usually into war things, but I like it. Interesting. You definitely capture your reader. It's just a little too short. I would suggest lengthening it. Maybe ...

First of all I want to say tremendous effort. It takes a lot of courage to post something. A lot of spelling mistakes. Break up your paragraphs, use capitalization and ...

Wow. A lot of language. Hate the language. :evil: Sorry. That's just me. Pretty interesting story, though, if you can get passed that. What are you trying to communicate? Make ...

This was a wonderful story! I can totally relate to the girl. At least in some aspects. I thought it was marvelous. A little tragic, but good. Nice touch with ...

I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That's a very rare thing for me to say! It's absolutely fantastic! I love the ending. The title is very fitting as well. Keep up the good ...

I thought it was funny. But, it was a little strange. Good though. I just scanned it. Maybe I'll read it again when I have more time. Sir Writergirl.

This is a good story. Not really my style, but good. I found a lot of spelling errors. The main thing I would like to comment is really just a ...

This is good. There are a few spelling errors, but overall, it is a marvelous story. Of course, a story can always use improvement. I suggest that you read over ...

A little confusing, but good. I think you should change tenses to make it more interesting. Don't need the Flash back. Just simply put dots across or something else to ...