writeholic

great poem.. I did get the metaphor. I loved it all the way through except the very last line. disappear doesn't seem strong enough, and it also breaks your rhythm. ...

Tell me what you think!!! Travel I once chanced upon A forsaken path Leading me through the Golden Trees and Thought not where it truly led me. But rather continued- ...

Tell me what you think please! Rise of Dreams Smoothly do they glide, Smoothly do they set The stars upon them twinkle Infinitely set. Dragging forth from wonder Inspirations' own ...

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I really love your poem. Great idea, and great sentences. BUT- I don't know if its just me, but it really throws me off that there's absolutely no punctuation. IE: ...

LEAVE YOUR POEM HOW IT IS!!! Sorry, everyone that posted above me, but sometimes poetry is absolutely incredible in its rough form, like this. Just fix holly (thats like stuff ...

Hi, I'm kinda new at this, I usually write poetry, but for some reason I had the absolutely insane idea to write a book. I know my grammar absolutely sucks ...

Poem The Poets hand quivers- With thoughts on edge of pen The world upon their shoulders- And races to begin. They fling words onto a page Before the thought will ...

Very interesting idea.... I wouldn't be so quick to crush your own ideas, if you don't believe in what your writing after you write it, why write it? Besides, ever ...

*won't state the spelling and punctuation mistakes already listed* Loved your idea for this poem, however, take another look at it and revise it, make it more poetic, and try ...

I really like your strong imagery and picture that you draw- however, I would take out the items in the ( ) it distracts from the overall picture. And I ...

Puts me in mind of drowning a little bit- I'm kinda confused about the message but I love your sense of imagery and the strong emotion that emerges from it. ...

I don't think its cliche!! What may make people think that is because its a little sing songy- but I think thats what make it great! I love you message ...

I really like the use of your emotion-- hope you really didn't punch a hole in your wall!! My only suggestion is to not try so hard at rhyming. Another ...

very nice! I love all three lines of it!