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Awesome poem! The rythm was touchy in places. You might want to reread your poem and look for the places where you have to read the line again. Though I ...

Wow, you picked an unusual topic. I like! You did something different then most writings with their cliches. I like the futuristic theme. There was nothing much to critique because ...

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Nicely done! but pay attention to the other reviewer's comments on forced rhymes, inconsistent rhythm and basic description. Do reread your poem. The rhyming was off in places and it ...

Oh my gosh. I absolutely love this. Even though the rhyming and tempo was off, I connected with it. You explain what the alcohol does to the dad and the ...

Awww, wow...This was very dramatic. I loved it! I think you did an awesome job at your second try at romantic fiction. Totally loved this! Becca

Wow, this was really intense. You explained everything so well that I saw what was happening. Scasha and Gunshot did all the nitpicking. “…Now, please burn for me.” Oh my ...

I absolutely loved this story. I felt like I was the girl waiting for her dad. The end was sad and happy. Oh my gosh, you really did a good ...

Hi laura claridge! You're on fanfiction.net? OMC, that is soo cool! I am too!!!!!!!!!!!! What's your name thingy? My name on there is randomnerd. Yah, I know, soooo original. :wink: ...

You really paint a picture of the sea. Wow, I must say this was an awesome poem! Now I want to go to the ocean! ^_^ Passion, anger, love and ...

I've never heard of Walt Whitman before. Now I want to go see who he is. Yawp...I like that word. Very nice poem. No spelling errors at all. I sound ...

OMC! You just told that publisher!!! Haha...Wow, I liked this poem, a lot! I like it just the way it is. I agree with panicitsamelon about the ryhming thing. It ...

I fixed this chappie. Tell me what ya think! Chapter 1 revised “Hey Sandi, hand me another,” I slurred, as I reached my hand out to her. She thrust another ...

The only thing that I saw wrong was aeons which I think you mean eons. Maybe? Very nice poem! Please continue writing!

This poem was very good and disturbing at the same time. I liked how the boy had faith and continued to live. The father seemed like a very depressed person ...