wordartisan

Okay, this is really interesting. I want to see more of it if you decide to continue, but if you do continue build up more of a conection between the ...

Just a piece that I wrote a little while ago for a class...I have been want to get some more here it is...please, don't be afraid to be mean to ...

I know it is short but I would like some help on it. I would like to focus on the ending...I know that it is really weak but I can't ...

This is good. I like the idea, but ther was one part that really bothered me “That’s right girly, and don’t you go screwing around or you’ll be headin’ towards ...

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh. I don't know what to say. Every one else has already covered the punctuation, grammar and technical pointers that were bothering me, so I'll just get strait to the ...

THERE IS NOTHING TO RIP APPART! :D Just a couple pointers and pokes. :smt064 You asked for a review that would rip apart your work. You gave your characters personalities, ...

I really liked this, but it was so confusing. I didn't get it. Was the first part a note? The rest of it was amazing. I really liked the main ...

W-O-W. wow. I could feel the emotion inside of the story. Nothing really needs to be changed, not in my opinion. I really like how the guy is more unsure ...

Absolutely enthralling. I loved it. I love the last line the way that it pulls the reader in. What she didn’t realize was that the lump in Luke’s back pocket ...

I loved this. The first three paragraphs about the princesses are really explanatory. I have a funny feeling that the princess will become more like the other two princess types. ...

Pain pulled at my back. Something drew me from my sleep; something that wasn’t right. I arched my back off the bed to relieve the pain. My wing flipped off ...

I loved this, it was so empowering. I want to know, just like everyone else, the story to why they are all in jail. There were a couple errors that ...

I loved entirely. But there are some parts that I don't understand. Does, James not remember the trials, or did he not have to complete them because Jisabelle wants him. ...

I really have no criticism for your story, I am just till kind of dazed, the story really hit home because of some experiences, and memories, (I never have been ...

Yeah, I agree with the reviews above as well: that you need to put more into the characters of Peyton and Mike. I really like your use of dialogue, that ...