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Thank you for the compliments and review. I will definitely go back through and smooth out those awkward sentences. Yes, this is a flash back. I had to cut chapter ...

“Anna!” Maryanne called. “Honey, I’m going to get Chinese. You want to come?” I walked out of my room and onto the first step of the stairs. “No. But could ...

Hello, I'm Kate. I have read chapter one as well, and I love this ending. I believe you rush in some places,like the beginning, but you can easily smooth that ...

Hello, my name is Kate. This was pretty well written! Although, I have a few comments: “Please stay?” she pulls her bangs out of her eyes 'she' would not be ...

This is very good. As Derek said, her angle is awkward at first, but that is nothing to stress about.You are a very talented artist! The only other thing I ...

Thanks for the comments! To answer Merlin34's question, this will soon become a fantasy novel. :)

**This is a revised addition of Tristan and Anna. There are three parts to this chapter. It's rated PG. Please critique as you feel necessary. Enjoy!** Chapter One It must ...

Major thank you for taking the time to review my chapter! I am definitely going to go through it and correct some things. But I was wondering, does anyone think ...

Hello, Katie here. :) Good job! Levan caught most of the grammatical errors. So, I won't bother being repetitive. I felt bad for Andre, but his anger threw off the ...

Hey guys! Thank you all so much for the great greetings. I think I have pretty much figured out how things work. So, on to the questions! AquaMarine asked: What's ...

Hello, my name is Katie. I am new here, and just figured out that I was suppose to post in the Welcome center. Anyway, a big thanks goes to Pretty ...

Hello, I'm Kate. This was pretty well written! You did a good job at describing what was happening now, but just as the others said, it raises many questions and ...

This is well written. Great job! I am a "newbie",and have never written a review before. But here it goes. You definitely made me feel sympathy for X and Y. ...

Wow..okay. So, how did it end up looking like this?

**Please comment honestly. I really like hearing what others think of my work,and how they believe I can improve. Enjoy!** Prologue “Tristan! NO!” I shouted, watching him being torn away ...