white_velvet_on_a_moonlit

Well, personally, I don't like rhymes, they annoy me, but maybe I can help you with other aspects of your poem. First off, think about your beats, syllables, whatever you ...

I'd like some feedback . . . I'm submitting this someplace if you think it's good enough. Unbroken Closed bluebells, holding morning’s promise. Dawn like the sea and shore torn ...

My interpretation: The narrator is closed up and not letting him/herself love anyone because of something that happened in the past and to make it all better again he/she needs ...

This is slightly personal, it's like a memoir in verse. A memory of when I was younger, I'm not sure how old. You know how sometimes you can't stop thinking ...

Sorry! Forgot to say this: I don't know how to punctuate a poem, so I didn't. Just though you guys should know the reason!

Okay: first thing I've posted. This I wrote a while ago and I really hate the beginning. But just let me know what you think. :oops: The Prodigal velvet_on_a_moonlit In ...

You really have a deep connection with yourself. If that make any sense :D What I mean is that you can describe yourself so well. In your poem you have ...

I really like the last few lines: " Drenched in memories dyed in deep purple, Will I be able to see my true self In your eyes?" . . . ...

Okay: Loved the description and title (beautiful) especially in the last, um, stanza? paragraph? Well, anyway, a tad confuzzling but heart, heart, heart!