whisperinghope

Very nice. I had some trouble at the start, though. I like the way you threw me into the scene, but I needed something sooner to help me figure out ...

This is a nicely done piece. I just have a couple of things. First of all it would be much easier to read if you put a blank line in ...

I like your poem. I love the descriptions, your wording is good. If I were to read it out loud, this is the way I would phrase it: The moment ...

I really like the picture this brings to my mind. Very nice. And I think its length is just perfect.

I don't know whether I like reading the poems or the comments more. I learn from both. I find that poetry criticism/comments come in two types: 1--those that cover mechanics, ...

Ya, I'm not sure what I think of the poem as a whole, a little too random for me BUT... i'll leave before my family turn me into an adult ...

This is my first real poem... This statement leads me to believe that you would like to write some more serious things. Don't give up. Working at things when you ...