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Well, if it helps at all, I thought the letting go repitition was well implemented

Hi. What be of uppage? YOUR FACE! Well...it's at least more-up then the keyboard you're presumably typing with. Unless.... you type with your thoughts? Except that wouldn't be typing, would ...

For me it comes in waves. I may go a week without a crit to my name. And then I may have an excessive amount of free time for a ...

to be honest, I didn't finish reading this. The idea isn't exactly original--- I've seen or heard this idea in many different forms many different times. Also; work on your ...

-sigh- Doesn't anyone wish to desecrate zombies, even if only in imagination?

Edited and updtated! Crits?

Ah, yes. I do love poems like this. Simplistic, yet well-done in their simplicity, none of the rhymes are forced, and your flow is excellent. You said what you felt ...

I'd probably pick it up....yeah. Sounds interesting. Ambigous. I don't write novels, but here's my title for my hopefully-I'll-eventually-finsih-and-get-published collection of poetry For: Ever

I'll start out by saying this; I didn't come up with this idea. I got it from TW, where it sadly died prematurely. Oh, and a shout out to Llama. ...

Emo poems make the reader laugh. Actual poems make the reader share the emotion of the writer, at least to some extent. Emo poetry is pretensious, pathetic, and laughable. And ...

This didn't suck by any means.... But it does need some major work. Have her read it aloud... She should notice some fairly large flow issues. There are several spots ...

"Forget You!", screamed behind hand Your so nineties , I direct to your hand Are you afraid of the dark? Or just boy bands? Barred clichés suppressed by Gak in ...

Lip ends curl in feint-wrought joy I'll feed you through this plasticized ploy Eat this, Wicker Man bright the gleam of your ribs pleases the night Surely you can't breathe ...

Just a song I wrote when I was bored and depressed. Hope you like it! :D Is there anybody home? Ahgh...not the greatest opening line I can see the candlelight ...

I'm curious as to the correlation of the title... But there were parts of this that were rather interesting. I liked "I could not see The poetry in me " ...