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I haven't read through the the crits [short amount of time] so forgive me if I repeat what they've already said. To start with-- please read through this before posting ...

Ok...I'll be less attempt-at-witty and more honest, then. I found it... slightly original I suppose. The flow was strained at best and I attempted to read it aloud--an endeavor I ...

Of Pigments And Protons The light caged in your eyes is released, spun of glass and liquid in shape. Its texture is ethereal and it tastes of Argon. As Noble ...

It was ok. I didn't feel like I was rapped around it. Some parts were week. Some things were confusing, it was to short too. I am, sorry, it didn't ...

Oh...potential... Yes, I think a revamped fully-narrative version could be more interesting. And punctuation helps. As for content.... Well, make it more poetic if that makes sense. It seemed awkward ...

I'm one of the "Good critiquer, shoddy poet" variety, and though I'd rather it be the inverse, I see no reason why I shouldn't share my unavoidably-harsh honest advice with ...

Ok, much less cliche then I expected. However, this needs some major work. The first glaring thing I noticed was punctuation I'll edit in a link to Claw's wonderful article ...

I skimmed the first and last page of responses. And now I'll force my opinions upon you: Lord of the Rings, on any literary level, is superior to Harry Poetter. ...

The Dark Is Rising Seqence by Susan Cooper The Dark Tower Series by Stephen King EDIT- I second the nomination for A Wrinkle In Time

Did you ever try getting a running start? Though I suppose that would hardly constitute a 'hop'... but still... At any rate [fun factoid: the rate of 'any' is in ...

well, frankly, I think you summed this up quite nicely with: "and out popped a poem, with an emo touch to it, It felt as though it was rushed, containing ...

He's been hailed as the greatest writer of all time. And not without reason. His impeccable ability to incorporate poetry into plays remains unrivaled, and the sheer tragedy of some ...

Show, don't tell. Though doing both can be effective at times, for now I'd reccomend focusing on the former However, you need to work on your phrasings. Cut the fluff- ...

I remember, back In my day, I had to walk 13 miles through sludge and snow just ter chase the oxen. Then I had ta rope em in an hook ...

I'd say PM me for a crit, but I'm sure I'll end up doing so anyway. Regardless, Welcome. I'm Ed, as you may or may not have been aware. You're ...