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Eh. Your rhymes were a stretch... But the ending was the shiz. :D Quite humorous, I rather enjoyed it.

NAME: (Brother) Evanual "Evan" Sarkahov AGE: 24 HEIGHT: 5' 10" WEIGHT: 185 lbs EYES: periwinkle blue HAIR: a brown-blonde medley PHYSIQUE: He's not 'ripped', but he could more then hold ...

Well, random lines in your head become random lines on a piece of paper. Not any better. My recommendation is to keep them in your head (or better yet: right ...

Harshness time :roll: This didn't make me feel anything. Try to envision the poem from the reader's view whilst writing it. Good poetry imbues to reader with whatever emotion is ...

This was simplistic to a fault. There was no substance ; it merely stated low-key, unemotional things in an off-hand manner. You need to make the reader feel something; y'know ...

Well, they only glowed because she passed through the security prism. I think I should make that clearer... And I'm planning on tying in the color with the plot, so ...

Hmmm... I can't decide if I want to wait 'till Zombie time to bring in my character....

^ WTF? Anyway... Welcome! Your genre-sipping sounds most agreeable (Yum!). I be Ed, bane of things I'm the bane of. Welcome!

ello there. I'm Ed. Who're you? -quizzical look-

^ I mostly agree. However, there doesn't necessarily need to be something good about a piece to justify critting it. In fact, in my mind, the worse the piece is, ...

OH! Question: Can I use my character and plotlines from an old zxombie RP? I never got to develop him fully, and I'd really like the chance to. If the ...

"God is more truly imagined than expressed, and He exists more truly than He is imagined." Saint Augustine If you do this, there will be nonbelievers. I know. The texts ...

Calling card in the gutter, free samples used as fuel. Evermore this engine sputters feeling heavy, a paperweight jewel. The spiraling phone cord relays messages, lost in thought like wine ...

Fand, I can't thank you enough for that wonderfully indepth critique, I've re-written it... I'm especially curious to see opinions on the new ending. I haven't decided whether or not ...

Does one really cover more space then the other? Or is the unit simply different? And even if the former is true, it's only because R3 has an 'alternate dimension' ...