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Note: harshness follows. GAH. No. I couldn't even finish this. This wasn't poetry. And I'm not saying this to discourage you from writing, on the contrary, I'm saying it in ...

Eh. Like Claw said, this didn't do anything for me. It was all very un-new and rather predictable. Yin and Yang have been touched on by thousands of poems, do ...

try beefing up the vocab here. A line, and thus a poem, can mean so much more [or simply 'else'] if the perfect adjective/adverb/noun/etc. is chosen. You've got some vague ...

well, everyone else has pointed out the content errors, and Claw already said my standard recommendation: Read. However, I still feel there's something to say. Whatever you do, do not ...

7:21 a.m. The demonic groans had faded since the sudden blast that caused the concerned cleric to flee further into the St. Asbotine's wine cellar. The atmosphere was wrought with ...

I'll edit out my recent segment, then. Evanuel's Motives/Etc. : 1. Get out of Church, preferably alive. 2. Head towards the Archaeological Museum in downtown Ashville. 3. Discover the truth ...

Dude. shiny pants ftw. Why would you try to fix that?

Hm... My dude could spend a few hours at the church, but I'd have to post another segment or two first. Would that be cool? And did I bring on ...

Mmm... 'Heroin Chick' has a perfect contrast. It looks so lively and warm, but then you realize what she's doing and the images that's typically linked with, and it's just ...

Dude...that first one is freaking awesome. Very good.

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I did some edits. Thanks very, very, much for all the lovely crits. (you really are too kind) :)

Dude, everyone loves to hate Nazi-esque corrupted politicians. w00t

This isn't my favorite from you by any means... Your images were nice, but the ending left them with little weight. I felt like you didn't finish it... like there ...

the ending didn't seem to fit in with the mood of the rest of the poem. And how can a mind and knowledge meld together? Isn't that sort of redundant? ...