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If I can tell the person's new to the form (in my mind, age is generally irrelevant) then I simply try to keep any bad habits from forming. Also, I'll ...

heheh...snogging....

for some reason I love the second one. But yeah...your angles, and use of colors, and...general amazingness is just...amazing. (three cheers for redundancy)

I can totally imagine 'Emptiness' being said in an over-dramatic gasp :D Oh, and why is there a rogue apostrophe before "cello"? Your transition in the middle could be a ...

My main gripe with this is the line breaks. They totally threw me off in parts, and made me stumble--not a good thing. Read around, happy breathing, etc. etc. ~Ed

I think I get what Claw means (can you ever really be certain with her?). The subject is touched upon, but you don't provide details to this particular instance. Stick ...

Gah... it's people like you that make this section lose respect.

haven't read it, probly never will. But Muse is in there, which means this mix kicks arse.

last one is phenomenal. Very good :)

proportions are way off... but it rather adds to the effect, doesn't it? So I'll just assume that was the intent, and go on being rather unnerved by it/him/bushbaby

mad kudos on that hat. :D

the trailer is superb. I've attempted Pivot, and mad props on making something this fantastic.

gah. Didn't make me laugh. Made me upset that I wasted my time critting a piece you clearly don't care about.

[slapintheface] Preaching = bad. You want the reader to feel what you feel, and unless you feel guilty and resentful, preaching is NOT the way to go about it. The ...

Show don't tell. I'm not going to go in detail on that again. I found the rhyming in the beginning tedious; like it was all said in one breath and ...