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I watched Juno yesterday, and I loved the soundtrack. So, I decided to write my own anti-folk song. Here ya go XD ~~~~~~ Oh, ring the church bell once for ...

Innisfree is from a Yeats poem, and tum-tum tree is from Lewis Carrol's Jabberwocky. The whole thing's very ambiguous and ridiculous, I know XD. Sorry about that.

19 tries too hard. And the format of 20 smells of dead-end experimentals. I have to say that I'm starting to be disappointed. This is only NaPo, of course, and ...

Zeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. That's all.

English. Considering that this is a writing site, I kind of expected it to be one of the options... XD

The sun was "brilliantly brilliant"? Brilliant. Really, though, try to actually think like the characters do, so they seem real and not just 2 dimensional. And just as general advice, ...

Hey! Ed here. I'll crit any and all poetry, lyrics, and art. If I really like you, you might be able to convince me to crit short prose too ;). ...

My main gripe with this is that it is too image dependent. Er, yeah. Maybe I'll give a more thorough crit later... for now, sorry about my briefness XD ~Ed

thanks for all the wonderful feedback! And Fand, I definitely used some of those changes ;)

I haven't been too happy with any of mine, and I've straight-up hated most of them... but there are a few good lines, I think: "[you] left scales behind like ...

April 13th I press chalk to the street and draw a door, made of blue oak and chicken bones, but you only pour laughter from your lips and scrape the ...

Do you've an explanation for the ellipsis in the titles? If not, I'd say cut them--they're bothering me, anyway :p. Really, though, for NaPos, these are outstanding.

Sexy Suzie. :p pseudo-Beatles reference, anyone?

April 5th: "To all the dead dears." newsprint catches tears, names and places warped like eyes, --foreign names, scratched eyes-- Two days later it's fish wrap and beautiful.

on the April 1st one, I'm not seeing the format as entirely effective. I'd almost prefer it if it were more unbound and not set in neat little strophes. At ...