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4/10... too simplistic :p

Would you crit for the CCF? In the spirit of cat-saving, of course.

:shock: Wow. You're...really good. I'm kind of in awe right now

No where in this did I myself feel the emotions you were trying to convey. I could observe them, yes, but you didn't make/let me feel . You start off ...

psst, It's not showing up :p But I'm pretty sure it'll be amazing. Or would saying that be considered bias?

Now, I'll start off by saying you've got a world of potential in front of you. When you're 9 years old (Or at least when I was nine) you're very ...

Hahaha, nice ending :p The opening paragraph was confusing, but overall nice pace; it kept me interested and intrigued. I'm not sure why you bothered with the disease bit as ...

At first the protagonist's gender is a mystery, but it really adds to the effect. As par with your style, there's no dialogue tags and limited pronouns... And while this ...

Hullo Splendi! M'name's Ed, and while I most likely won't be critiquing your work (I'm a poetry kinda guy) It's doubtless I'll be seeing ya around. Feel free to PM ...

I'm not gonna even address content on this one... Your syllabic count was all over the place and it murdered the flow. And I don't mean smothered-by-a-pillow murder, I mean ...

You’re hiding in my finger-folds. So it’s longingly that I stroke this window pane, (Spun of glass and marred by UVs and Usees) How long before your air runs out?

you seemed bound by your rhyme scheme here. I'm not saying the rhymes don't help with the rhythm--they do. And I'm not saying you should nix them either--you shouldn't. Rather, ...

not suer what's goin on with the odd-looking thing towards the bottom.... but I love more Ork/c[alt: Goblin] humo[u]r!

um...6/10? I guess?

novels terrify me. So much....time...that you invest. Idk... If I can come up with a good plot idea, and maybe an outline, I might give it a shot...Though I've never ...