whence

I'll only make one specific comment, and that is to your use of ' COINCIDENCE ' Don't resort to gimmicks in poetry. Use the power of your words to express ...

gah, sorry. The edits keep getting messed up... I'm not sure why... But I've done a re-re-edit, and hopefully it'll stick this time.

I have a sister, and she's a good writer. She just doesn't like forums in general

edited! I hope I fixed the POV issues, thanks for the crits :)

the checkeredy guy up a few posts with the hat I want to own is freaking awesome. I pretty much want that entire ensemble. You need to ink and color ...

"Death.....Now" Intriguing, Yeah, cut out those and what's in between. All the best, Ed (Note to anyone who knows anything: :D)

Okay, this is my first attempt at poetry, so please be gentle with me. I'm definitely open to lots of critiquing, since I know... basically nothing about writing poems. First ...

Hi, welcome, and halo! I read some of your stuff, and I'm sooo jealous. XD Welcome to YWS. Most of us don't bite. I object to propaganda, even if it ...

Chapter 1 Christian raised his eyebrows at me and studied his watch. “You’re late.” “Oh, shut up.” I brushed my hair back and looked over at him. He was leaning ...

erm, I disagree. Conflict can be much more subtle then that.

i could've sworn I already critiqued this... Hmmmm... Anyways, I haven't read the other people's reviews, so bear with me and the potential repetitiveness. You need to come up with ...

first off, it's 'pettles'. The main issue here is that she's not expression anything here. She needs to expand upon it and actually complete the unfinished idea here. She gives ...

6.8/10 takes too long :p

anyone else planning on entering? Come on, you could enter a scribble and you'd at least get the consolatory critique, if not more! -is hoping this doesn't die...again-

you get a crit ticket, just for that last line. -crit ticket-