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Hey there, Biffle to review: First of all, I think the brackets: 1. my (shared) room. 2.then, as I walked past ECB (Extremely Cute Boy), 3. he was seriously HOT.(And ...

Bifflesocks is here to review. This is going to be har as of the shortness. If this is supposed to be asuspense story, why does it happen so fast? Isn't ...

~Cameron~ "I don't care, we need a victim for your Uncle and thats final!" "Dad, calm down. I'll come with you Diedre," I said trying to ease the tension. Dad's ...

Hey guys, my first storybook! *Yayness* This is about a war, thats right, a war between us (Helion Race) and them (UniForm). Pm me before we start so i can ...

This was really good, buty the ending felt like you ran out of time and couldn't be bothered to finish it... Either that, or, it seemed quite cool, a short, ...

~Cameron.~(In this, i tried to justify their madness by making them have a sick uncle, if you hate it, ill delete it :)) (P.s. the '___' is there because I ...

This seems like fantasy fiction... not an other. Also, no offence, but the vampires vs. werewolves thing is getting really old and cliche. Vampire hates werewolf. Big war. Family in ...

Hey Kitty Kat :) I like this poem its really dirfferent to all the others ive read. One thing Im not sure if 'Squell' is supposed to be Squeel... But ...

Thanks :) Now it makes snese, ahaha, i thought your MC was a girl... Sorry, but he comes off as a bit girly to me :)

Hey Lolo. The one thing, other than what Ethser pointed out, is that there are some uncapitalised I's. Your writing was beautiful and fluent, but those pesky little I's always ...

WOW. This is so amazing. The idea was good but it seems t might be in the wrong place... Is this supposed to be about love or something completely different. ...

I quite like this piece, but the lady's face is odd. Her forehead is further back than her chin and that gives it an imbalanced look. Her lips imbalance this ...

Biffle here to review. I really like this piece, you personal voice in it is really authentic sounding. Kudos for the idea, I would have never come up with something ...

Well, I guess we're starting now then Cool. Let's rock ^^ sorry if i started too early...

Biffle here to rerview. this is short so there isnt much to say but only two things that dont really work for me :) (1)I was still sat silently on ...