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I like the over-all idea, it is a good start, but there is some work that can be done. Over all, your poem is simply about being left at the ...

Alright, I know it's immature and stupid, but I don't really have any other way to get my feelings out, so here goes I guess. I saw you and you ...

My dad is getting married soon and he asked if I would write him a poem to be read at the wedding or reception. Obviously I said yes *angel face* ...

I was a little girl, who once believed in fairies. Peter pan, the muffin man, Santa and all he carries. I believed in magic, I believed in luck, I believed ...

First off, welcome to YWS! Secondly, this poem is good but lacks context, I suggest adding and explaining. You'll find (just as I did when I joined) that everyone rips ...

I love it, its good, but you want it to be GREAT, and I here to tell just just how I think you could do that :) Alright, so first ...

I like it but try to break it up. I would suggest: Floral stains, Cats and Love trains I am doomed to talking to walls and felines collecting whats old ...

In Spain for a week, just wrote this, I think it's crap but you tell me what you think :). Cultures are different, lives aren't the same. Many things are ...

Alright, this poem (just to be honest) at first creeped me out. I liked it yes, but your word choice and use of imagery really made me a little creeped. ...

Alright, I like the idea but I do have a few suggestions for you :) So I was right all along. I can't believe that it's all wrong. Like a ...

Hey, first off, great poem and I know the feeling of being really really pissed off at a family member, for me it's my dad. I do have to say ...

I do like it, I like the rhyme scheme, but I do have a few things I'd like to point out. We build our empires hoping to impress our friends ...

I love the poem :) you did a great job capturing the annoying feeling of having yet another long day. It's cute and fun to read, but seems to stop ...

You so far have a great idea going, but try to tidy it up a bit maybe? Here are my suggestions :) Some day I wil have, Already been pointed ...

I liked it a lot, I like the rhyming that seemed (almost) perfect, and I liked the theme. It really made you think and wonder about what was really going ...