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Re: More Photos xD
Omg this is adorable XD. I love the feet on the rock. The accent of the coloring of the shoes is just perfect too XD, I know that sounded weird. ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Goodbye, my friend (Adiós, mi amigo)
Nomnomnomnom Me gusta :) hahaha. And you said you couldn't write? What do you call this then? This is gorgeous, in both Spanish and English :). Though it's funny to ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Writer's Block
This is excellent, and very well written, but I do have some points I'd like to point out: Uh oh. I don't like this line. It takes away from the ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Favorite poets...?
My favorite poet by far is Emily Dickinson. She's the one that inspired me to be a poet in the first place, and much of my work is merely an ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Song Birds are the only Kings
This is adorable and sweet :). My biggest problem was that I don't understand where songbirds really fit in, and you don't explain why songbirds are kings, let alone why ...
Nov 14, 2011 -
Re: Talking to myself
I was going through my documents today and found this, I haven't seen it in forever....I thought I'd scrapped it because I thought it was so awful, but looking at ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Life Without Love
Alrighty, so I see you're new here, so first off I'd just like to say welcome, and this is an AMAZING poem for a first try :), and even for ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: The Baby Dragon
This story makes a good preface to something, almost a sort of explanation why a teenager, or young-adult dragon may feel the way he does about his mother. However, it ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Harry Potter, Voldemort and a cookie.
Haha this is hilarious, I've seen a lot of short jokes like this before. I am a total Potterhead and admin on a few FB pages about it, so I ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Exhaustion
I really like this, it has a good flow and a good rhythm. Just to comment on the comment above, I don't thing "god" needs to be capitalized because you're ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Hope
This was really good, and very visual. The emotions ever deep, and the punctuation was perfect! The only thing I noticed was that your language wasn't very.....Hmm, shall we say ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Falling Asleep
Uhmmm, alright, great start. However there are some things I'd really like to point out: In a solace of black and white, Good start as long as you take this ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: A Colder Calypso
I really liked this, and I can't see anything particularly major to critique you on. The only thing I could say is you could add a little more flavor to ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: A heart is never to waste
Great poem, great meaning, although kind of a rip off of a few Journey songs......Either way, your biggest problem was punctuation and that's what I'm here to fix! S ome ...
Nov 13, 2011 -
Re: Sinking
Okay, so this was adorable :), and also very deep. Honestly, when I first read it the "THIS IS THE SONG THAT NEVER ENDS" song got stuck in my head.....Yupp, ...
Nov 12, 2011
