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My first impression is that this poem doesnt really speak to me but it is very well put together and runs through perfectly. I like it keep it up

that was really good. try either spacing evenly or putting a little less space between the different parts though it just looked a little strange

The lines don't seem to run together very smoothly. I know some people who sit and read a poem that they wrote to themselves (out loud) a couple of times ...

This is a very long poem so bear with me and if you have any tips on a name it would be greatly appreciated. I've taken the ending off of ...

i see the pathetic girl staring back at me from the mirror i see her i loath her i hear her cry yet i dont know what to say back ...

wierd names

they say the grass is greener on the other side. but the idiot to say that, lied. no matter if your rich. no matter if your poor. you will hate ...

this may sound a bit dramatic but i write because i hate alot of things in the world and writing helps me side step those things

ok.....i get this but it stops so suddenly and took me a while to get the last to lines and figure out how they went together

this is really good. and really true. but it starts out so suddenly it took me a reading it a couple of times to get it.

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untill you live your life, with out having to know whats wrong. and whats right. untill you life your life, with out a care in the world. untill you live ...

ok...what?

this is good......but u'll and till arent words its you'll and 'till or untill

this is good.....but not at all true......they would have a reason to fight....