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i personally think this is absolutly great and it has power and meaning and emotion to it. But i see where people would think that it's a little choppy. There ...

all i really have to say to that is WTF i dont really understand the poem and dont think there is much of the point gotten clearly across it's good ...

this is really good and i like it.....lol another good poem from Emily about iraq :)

seems like it could be a song but try fixing the first part that's all i dont like....you say bleeding twice

dont you care you say you do but you dont show it and you dont know when you say you care you break me more when you try to build ...

it's not bad but it could be better i just have a few tips first when you say: All the things I put myself through when I only thought I ...

Okay before you read this people have been comenting about my punctuation....I agree there are some places that need it but I suck at grammer. If you want to fix ...

it's kinda weird and choppy and the lines dont run together....i love constant rhymes but only when it's not forced....

i like it but try changing the beginning it's kinda weird..... and when you said: What am I saying? That's not a heart. It cannot love; I could tell from ...

it's really good an i like it...i dont really have any tips other than just keep up the good work and this is a really good poem and it speaks ...

Why is it that all the tears wind up in my eyes why is it that all the fears wind up at my side why cant i escape them why ...

i really like this....but i do have a few comments. first love and wove don't rhyme and second the ending could be a little better try something other than faking ...

This is really good but try making the spaces a little different it didnt run together very well. and instead of "fall and break a leg" try something maybe a ...

wow....that's.....deep I believe that a person should write what every they feel and it's only true if it comes from them. This is a perfect poem.

This is really good and i think it has a lot of depth to it. It's good as it is but if you feel like adding a little more meaning ...