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it's great i didnt see any flaws....but you should write something to go around make it more of a story rather than just a short entry i think it could ...

This piece was great....but you might want to work on grammer like when dillon says "i thought you were mad at me" he says made instead of mad so just ...

i love this poem and think it could be amazing....but why dont you try formatting it like this so that the reader doesnt look at the lines and go "nope ...

i LOVED the ending...but in the first part did you mean to say skin? how can sin be perfect? that's all that i found and other than that it's perfect ...

i think this is realy good and the only thing you need to work on is making the parts flow together a bit more and making the lines a bit ...

i think this is a really good poem at first glance but there are some things about it that kinda threw me off... first of all the first two parts ...

thanks i'll try to work on punctuation but i've always had a really hard time with that.....it's almost impossible

wow...it's really good...and scary..very scary...the only thing i didnt think fit well was when you said 'he never answered her last call' you could say 'he never answered her calls' ...

I called and then again, I tried Until the moon grew full I cried, Couldn't breath and couldn't speak Fell to the ground when I was weak. I pulled the ...

it's not bad but it's kinda hard to understand...big words....gah not every one knows what those mean

i loved it but i think that it will make people want to read it more if you add in something like what this woman said or what the man ...

This is really good....straight forward and not hard to understand. It makes sense and tells the absolute truth. lol i cant really say anything that would be of importance other ...

Why is it that all the tears wind up in my eyes? Why is it that all the pain winds up at my side? You say you love me then ...

i dont really understand it.....the title doesnt go with the poem and i dont get the 79 part. If i thought hard enough i would probably get part of it ...

that's awesome tell me when you have more!