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Re: She had asthma
Hey, nice work :) "She had asthma. As she gasped for air next to me, I could only think of how it sounded." You should probably describe the sound of ...
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Re: Jasper Chp.1
Hi, so far, so good! Just try to use a little less unnecessary words. "He had learned that people seemed to fear this fake confidence, perhaps because it was something ...
Jun 20, 2014
