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The rhyme is forced because it had to rhyme for class. I wrote it a long time ago before I really had any understanding of poem mechanics. I haven't edited ...

Very nice! Especially since it was spur of the moment. Besides a few grammar things, it is a great poem!

Great poem, and great style. I love the way you never really say what you are talking about, but you still make things clear. However, you do tend to jump ...

Sometimes the thought of the moment is the truth at its basic. And this would be such a thought! :D

Absolutely amazing! The imagery was superb! Every line dripped with emotion!

Utterly breath-taking and imaginative! It is filled with wonder and possibilities!

Really beautiful! Some parts are just a bit confusing the first time you read them, but overall a wonderful prayer!

Happiness, laughter, and smiles as well All sounding like a beautiful bell Ringing, Ringing all around Making such a wonderful sound Beautiful things are fading away Sadness and emptiness enter ...

I am perfect. I'm smart. I'm beautiful. I'm talented. I'm good at everything. I never have to study. I have a long list of guys who asked me to the ...

They are all really good, but except for the last one, everything just kinda blended together. It was hard to tell one part from another. Otherwise they were great! Keep ...

I've always loved to read. I learned to read (or at least memorize... :smt002 ) before I started pre-k. I read almost non-stop. In fact I get into more trouble ...

Very interesting poem. It is certainly thought provoking. It is even kind of funny when you think about it. It is true how sometimes rhymes can fly and flow, or ...

Overall, it is a good poem, but it needs just a little work. For example in this line I made find it filled with joy, I may find it filled ...

Hey,I think that you capture the feeling of having to wear armor to protect yourself from everyone else. Others on here have said that this poem lacks emotion, and it ...

Thanks everyone for the comments, but i didn't add punctuation on purpose. And you don't have to capitalize every line. It is suposed to sound stressed and run together.