victoria781

Nice job :) It was nice to read something with a different structure. I think you could probably use a bit more detail, so that I have a clearer image ...

I like how this rhymes. It's great but for a couple lines that don't fit the rhyme scheme. "And then the evening unfolds" (add another syllable) "To view with serenity ...

"The beating of my heart, increases as light goes dark." "My feelings grow stronger, Though I know nothing of you." "Is this true?" (Don't need the "though") "The thought of ...

Haha, I loved the first two lines. Great passion in that. Not so much the following two; they sounded, to me, a bit weaker "You made me...you made me..." I ...

Took this one down...hated it

I think the 3rd stanza should be left out. It adds nothing to the poem. Also, there is quite a bit of stalling in the poem...I wish you'd condense it. ...

Hmm...I was told by some poet great that good poems will always paint an image. No matter the topic, the words you share must detail some picture in the mind. ...

Oh, I loved this. It was great to read. I don't know much about meter, but something seemed a bit off at times...I felt inclined to add or take away ...

Hey, I 'm new and I have little experience. I, honestly, am a little intimidated in here and do not mean to belittle anyone.. I will say I liked this ...

How is this poem? Good, bad? What needs improvement? A shallow puddle near the middle of the road The clouds have now tired from crying so much The water lays ...